Let's Begin

1st Verse:

I try not to judge

But still cry when I love...

Even when it hurts I know GOD cares

For better or worse I try and give you my soul laid bare...

In these words and rhymes

In order for us to change the world it's gotta take time...

Because we are men and women only

I try and use my pen to love and defend not so lonely...

When GOD is with us

Tears become less than dust

With fears we can adjust...

To love and glory

I'm still trying to get my head around the whole story...

But the picture 

Is in Biblical literature 

And in return our spiritual is richer.

Hook:

Where do we start

From the brain or the heart

What's your name and do you need help in the dark

I know I do so let's walk together and leave a mark.

2nd Verse:

Love pours out my pen

I applaud God until the end...

It's not just me trying to better myself

Spent a lot of nights crying because the inner weather was hell...

Not the kind of summer I wanted

GOD has our numbers but it's Satan whom taunted...

But it's easy to be deductive

And it's even more breezy to be destructive

So when I pick up a pen I ignore the sword and start being constructive...

Jesus amazes most

Gets us through mazes that we chose...

And his love is greater than great

The good news indeed and I take love and my fate...

Is to be decided when the time-is-right

Let's phase out evil cos it's dynamite 

To the people I hope in your lives there's light.



 

Comments

Suggestions for improving hip hop lyrics

Hi, Alex. I tried recording your hip-hop poem but got stuck at the last two lines:

Let's phase out evil cos it's dynamite 
To the people I hope in your lives there's light.

I am not sure what that means and how to speak it. Evil is dynamite? Evil is dynamite to the people? To say something is "dynamite" can mean explosive or destructive. In other contexts "dynamite" can mean good or attractive. "Your speech was dynamite." "Your dress looks dynamite."

Thanks for looking at this. Never hestitate to rewrite poetry or lyrics. Several rewrites are often needed to make the piece better. 

More awkward phrases:

Love pours out my pen

I think you should say "
Love pours out of my pen" or "Love pours from my pen."

I try and use my pen to love and defend not so lonely

I am not sure what "
defend not so lonely" means. Please clarify.

One more:

And in return our spiritual is richer.

The correct word is spirituality. Or you could say spiritual life.

Thanks for considering my suggestions. - Richard

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