Song of Peace

Hi everyone,

I present to you 'Song of Peace' used as part of a welcome to a liturgy and can get quite complex in that the song has two choruses that are sing at the same time, splitting th church up into two competitive halves (quite fun too!).
I do recall using this one time and one piece of feedback I received was questionning the reference to the 'gender' of the Holy Spirit (I use the term 'his').  Any advice on this would be very welcome!

Have a great day Richard, and all.

Music can be downloaded here.  Copyrightten for all to use without any restriction.

Lyrics:
Jesus turned to his disciples and said to them, "I leave my peace, and as the father sent me, I now send you to every nation' and so in prayer:

Chorus one:
We sing a song of peace, we sing a song to share
A peace bestowed by jesus, to show us how to care.
And may the Spirit spread his wings
Filling our hearts with peace for evermore
to bring us always closer to the Lord

Chorus two:
We sing a song for one another 
and we know the truth and life of Christ is held within
so may the, the Spirit, hold us in he peace, so that
We may live forever and always stand together with our Lord.

Jesus turned to his disciples and said to them, "I leave my peace, and as the father sent me, I now send you to every nation'.  Go now in my peace.
 

Comments

Song of Peace with the wings of the Spirit

Steve, a very fine song. What a vibrant expression of faith.

I can understand how some would prefer a gender neutral Holy Spirit. Here are some possibilities:

Chorus one:
We sing a song of peace, we sing a song to share
A peace bestowed by jesus, to show us how to care.
And may the Spirit hover over us,
Filling our hearts with peace for evermore
to bring us always closer to the Lord

Chorus one:
We sing a song of peace, we sing a song to share
A peace bestowed by jesus, to show us how to care.
And may the wings of the Spirit spread wide,
Filling our hearts with peace for evermore
to bring us always closer to the Lord

Richard Schletty | Schletty Design and Music | www.schletty.com

Song of Peace with the wings of the Spirit

Thanks very much Richard.  I think your suggestions are beautifully expressive.  I may have to change the synopation of the tune slightly to fit, but always a nice challnege!  Thank you very much for the recommendations. 

Steve

Song of Peace with the wings of the Spirit

I realize "prosody" is a challenge – matching stressed and unstressed syllables to the music. How about this?

And may the Spirit cover us,
Filling our hearts with peace for evermore...

or

May wings of the Spirit cover us,
Filling our hearts with peace for evermore...

I see that in Chorus Two you wrote "he" but meant to write "his." I recommend dropping the pronoun. How about this? "hold us in peace" can easily be sung in proper rhythm as even quarter notes. Like so:

Chorus two:
We sing a song for one another 
and we know the truth and life of Christ is held within
so may the, the Spirit, hold us in peace, so that
We may live forever and always stand together with our Lord.

Richard Schletty | Schletty Design and Music | www.schletty.com