A SON KIND OF WAY

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Whoever can come up with a better line at the end of song and I accept it will be credited with half of the song rights.  Currently it is:  In a Son Kind of way.

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In a Son Kind of way – options for lyrics

Through the rising of the Son
or
Through the gifting of His Son
or
Through the giving of His Son
or
The gift of His Son to us all
or
His Son lights the way

I like the song. Needs a bit of tweaking as far as prosody.  Here are my suggestions:

Oh, where would we be had not a savior been born
On that wonderful Christmas morning?
No prophecies fulfilled, no hope of redemption,
No Christmas hymns to sing.

Chorus:
But the guiding star has filled the night!
The shepherds knelt down at the stall.
The Father above has blessed us with love:
The gift of His Son to us all.

And who could have taken your place long ago
On a cross for the sake of our sins?
Oh, where would we be without the precious babe
Who showed us the way to forgive?

Chorus:
Yes, the guiding star has filled the night!
Life everlasting is our call.
The Father above has blessed us with love:
​​​​​​​The gift of His Son to us all.
​​​​​​​The gift of His Son to us all.

Richard Schletty | Schletty Design and Music | www.schletty.com

Prosody

You awhile back sent me a video and some information about Prosody.  I've found it useful and incorporated (some) of the principles I learned into my writing!  Just wanted to state this helpfulness of yours publicly.  

WHERE WOULD WE BE?

But through the Gift of God's Son, new life has been won, without it(Him), WHERE WOULD WE BE.

TITLE: WHERE WOULD WE BE?

Maybe repeat with 
Oh tell me where would we be?
Could also say
The work has been done instead of new life has been won. 
God's leading for you John.

Thanks

Thanks,  I'll get back to you.  JOHN

Good Song

I like it, if I were going to change anything with the last line in the song it would be:

But the Father above has blessed us with love, with the gift of His Son Christmas day

Rewrite of song

My dear songwriters who contributed to this Christmas song that I’ve tried to perfect for 33 years. Several of you have responded with lyrics and I thank you. I have been agonizing for days on making this song better with your lovely words, but as I said before it’s all about the song. I chose the words that fit best with the melody, the theme of the song and that were more singable and believe me I tried singing them all. So with that in mind, here is the newest version. [maybe not the final version. Many of our hymns today have evolved over a span of hundreds of years. Hopefully this song will go on beyond our years. The color codes below are lyrics you contributed:

WHERE WOULD WE BE? ©1989 by John Bennett

(Revised 2021 by Richard Schletty, Kevin Bowen, Daniel Shaughnessy)
G D Em D
Oh, where would we be had not a savior been born
C D G D
On that wonderful Christmas morning?
G D Em D
With no promise of hope or redemption
C D G
And no Christmas songs to sing

Chorus
C Bm Am G
No guiding star to fill the night
C Bm Am G
No Shepards to kneel and to pray
G D Em D
But the Father above gave his one only son
C D G
To show us the light and the way

G D Em D
And who would there be that could take our place
C D G D
On a cross for the sake of our sins?
G D Em D
Oh where would we be without a babe in the manger
C D G
Who showed us the way to forgive?

Chorus:
C Bm Am G
No guiding star to fill the night
C Bm Am G
No life beyond the grave (pause) note: I kept this line for dramatic effect
G Em D
But the Father above gave his one only son
C D G
To show us the light and the way

Instr then first chorus

Ooh fun...a CONTEST

Ooh fun a CONTEST.  Glad to see we have resolution.  (For now) 

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